Post by bigkitty75 on Sept 15, 2008 0:09:55 GMT
So this is my 1st story. It's like medieval fantasy-sih. I dont have very good english. I would like if you would tell me your opions on this. This is just like the Preface or what ever.lol I would like to know if I should continue this story?
Melody walked up to her sister Annastasia.
" Oh, thank God you got her." Melody said in her soft voice.
" Yes, it was not easy but i got her." Annastsia remarked.
" Well now the past is behind us. She safe now." Melody said graciously.
" Mel, you can't leave her here. She doesnt belong here!" Annastasia said distressed.
" Ann, you know it's the right thing." Melody tried to comfort her sister.
" How can you do this to your own daughter, Mel?"
" Because I know it's safer here. Elyse will be just fine. Now please give me her." Meldoy explained
Annastasia knew in her mind it was right. She gave Elyse a kiss on her head and gave her to Meloday.
Meldoy held her child in her hand. She brushed Elyse bangs out of her face. She gave a little giggle.
" Don't worry Elyse will see you soon. When you find him he will bring you back to me." Mel told Elyse.
" She doesn't understand you Melody." Annastasia told her.
" She will when the time comes." Melody answered back.
Annstasia and Elyse walked through the woods. It was so calm and serene.
Annastasia broke the silence " Mel, what if she doesn't me him. She will never get her powers or come back to our world."
"Anna! He will don't worry!" Melody yelled. It was very rare that she ever did. Melody was a clam and caring person. Not such a jumpy and curious person like her sister.They walked the rest of the way on quiet.
Finally the many miles they had walked was done. They had reached the little village.
" Here is her house." Melody said holding back her tears. Anna put her hand on Mel shoulder to comfort her.
" All will be well,Mel."
Melody put her child down on the ground. Elsye was completely oblivious to what was happening. She smiled.
" Do not worry my child you will come back to me.You are safer her for now." Meldoy told the toddler.
The baby sat ther looking at her mother. Then she blinked and they were gone!
Elyse looked for her. She saw nothing but darkness. They had disappeared almost like magic. The thought of being alone scared her. Elyse started to cry. There was noise comming from inside the house. The door slowly opened.
She started to crawl away. The lady was shocked she looked around to see who had left the child there was no one.She picked up the baby and took her inside.
" Thomas look someone left a baby at our door. It's like our prayers have been answerd." Said the young lady.
" Dear this is almost like magic." Thomas said as he hugged his wife.
" I think her name should be Elyse." Said Elizibeth.
Melody walked up to her sister Annastasia.
" Oh, thank God you got her." Melody said in her soft voice.
" Yes, it was not easy but i got her." Annastsia remarked.
" Well now the past is behind us. She safe now." Melody said graciously.
" Mel, you can't leave her here. She doesnt belong here!" Annastasia said distressed.
" Ann, you know it's the right thing." Melody tried to comfort her sister.
" How can you do this to your own daughter, Mel?"
" Because I know it's safer here. Elyse will be just fine. Now please give me her." Meldoy explained
Annastasia knew in her mind it was right. She gave Elyse a kiss on her head and gave her to Meloday.
Meldoy held her child in her hand. She brushed Elyse bangs out of her face. She gave a little giggle.
" Don't worry Elyse will see you soon. When you find him he will bring you back to me." Mel told Elyse.
" She doesn't understand you Melody." Annastasia told her.
" She will when the time comes." Melody answered back.
Annstasia and Elyse walked through the woods. It was so calm and serene.
Annastasia broke the silence " Mel, what if she doesn't me him. She will never get her powers or come back to our world."
"Anna! He will don't worry!" Melody yelled. It was very rare that she ever did. Melody was a clam and caring person. Not such a jumpy and curious person like her sister.They walked the rest of the way on quiet.
Finally the many miles they had walked was done. They had reached the little village.
" Here is her house." Melody said holding back her tears. Anna put her hand on Mel shoulder to comfort her.
" All will be well,Mel."
Melody put her child down on the ground. Elsye was completely oblivious to what was happening. She smiled.
" Do not worry my child you will come back to me.You are safer her for now." Meldoy told the toddler.
The baby sat ther looking at her mother. Then she blinked and they were gone!
Elyse looked for her. She saw nothing but darkness. They had disappeared almost like magic. The thought of being alone scared her. Elyse started to cry. There was noise comming from inside the house. The door slowly opened.
She started to crawl away. The lady was shocked she looked around to see who had left the child there was no one.She picked up the baby and took her inside.
" Thomas look someone left a baby at our door. It's like our prayers have been answerd." Said the young lady.
" Dear this is almost like magic." Thomas said as he hugged his wife.
" I think her name should be Elyse." Said Elizibeth.
